Lovers and crushes is a great type of relationship to have. If you have known someone for a while and you have this feeling or nervousness when your around them, or you blush, or your hands get all clammy and your heart starts racing, that means that you either love them (not in love, but love) or you just have a crush on them. In Romeo and Juliet when Romwo first saw Juliet, he said he was in love. Back then in Shakespearean time lovers and crushes relationships seemed different. Once they saw someone beautiful, or handsome, they thought they were in love. Nowadays, when that happens, your not in love, you just find them attractive. If you have known someone for awhile and you start falling for them, that could be love, or just a crush. When Romeo says 'Juliet is the sun' he is meaning that she is beautiful, like the sun and that she lights up his world. It could also mean that she`s warm and bright!
It's pretty easy to argue with this topic, but lovers and crushes, and parents are pretty important in teenagers lives. The most important relationship out of the two are lover and crush relationships. If you don't have a lover and crush relationship, that means you won't be ready for the future. You may not know what to do when you get a boyfriend or girlfriend. It might be embarassing to ask a friend and maybe you feel uncomfortable asking your parents. So, that's why I think crush/lovers relationship is important.
Relationships with parents is a little more difficult. Teenagers think that their parents don't get them and don't get what their going through. Parents do get it though, they were a teenager once as well. Juliet didn't want to marry Paris but her dad made her. When she told her dad she didn't want to marry Paris he said:
Hang thee, young baggage! disobedient wretch!Relationships with parents is a little more difficult. Teenagers think that their parents don't get them and don't get what their going through. Parents do get it though, they were a teenager once as well. Juliet didn't want to marry Paris but her dad made her. When she told her dad she didn't want to marry Paris he said:
I tell thee what: get thee to church o' Thursday,
Or never after look me in the face:
Speak not, reply not, do not answer me;
My fingers itch. Wife, we scarce thought us blest
That God had lent us but this only child;
But now I see this one is one too much,
And that we have a curse in having her:
But now I see this one is one too much,
And that we have a curse in having her:
Out on her hilding!
Her dad was saying that if she did not marry Paris on Thursday that she would not be able to live with them and that they would disown her as their child.
Today, parents and children would usually talk it over, and if the bride doesn't wanna marry the groom they don't have to. Unless it's a business marriage, then the bride has no choice.
So, relationships back then are pretty different from what they are now. They are very important relationships in teenagers lives. Those relationships make you feel special, and loved.
Great start, can't wait to read the final product!
ReplyDeleteThese are really good arguments!! Perhaps include someone else also agreeing with you, that might help make it even better! But don't forget to vote them O.O
ReplyDeleteAlright! Will do! Thanks!
DeleteOverall really good! Maybe try to focus more on ONE relationship that relates to teenagers rather than 3, and have one opposing one in the middle. But even without that this is a really strong essay!
ReplyDeleteI will definitely do that! Or atleast 2! :) Thank you
DeleteGreat examples! I like how you used that example "Juilet is the sun" to show how Romeo describes her but it could mean more then being beautiful it can mean shes warm, bright and always shining! Did you ever think about that?
ReplyDeleteI love the structure of your essay, and I agree with Abi about the whole agreeing with you thing. I can't wait to read your final post
ReplyDeleteGreat rough draft! Remember to roof read for your finish copy. You made your arguments with solid evidence!
ReplyDeleteI love your essay, I also liked how you used lines from the play:)
ReplyDeleteGood job I agree with Avery try to stick with one relationship but overall good job on your rough draft.
ReplyDeleteNice work. i will use some of your technique.
ReplyDeleteGreat Essay Kat ! It's awesome how you have used some examples from the play
ReplyDeleteYou have great arguments. I like how you used examples from the play; I look forward to reading the final product.
ReplyDeleteThanks Kat.. your peers clearly connected with your ideas. Things you need to improve: your thesis is vague… relationships are different is too big…. try to be more specific about what has changed or why, your conclusion is similar… not sure what your saying exactly. Things you did well: you connect to personal feelings that your peers enjoyed, you have an appropriate quote that builds on your argument. I think your thoughts are there we just need to keep working on putting them into clear, concise, structured essays. :)
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